please rate my music - need feedback :) thankyou

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https://soundcloud.com/commander-perth-freestyle

[Bellini48]

Ok, so I'm listening. Rap? With hip-hop beat? Curious...it's a bit sarcastic isn't it? Your voice is definitely different...you think that rude words are going to attract attention?
The way the world's going, you propbably will attract attention.
It's not my sort of stuff, but all the best kid!!!