Less is More

[Brainvoyager]

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Enjoy! mile:

Hope to get some feedback...

[CRAZY-HORSE]

not really my thing mate, but Jerome will offer you some valued commentry, of that im sure.

[Jerome]

[video=youtube;e-FxqLONQtY]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e-FxqLONQtY&feature=youtu.be[/video]

Enjoy! mile:

Hope to get some feedback...

OK I am going to stick my neck out again - and probably get it chopped off too but here goes. Electronic music can very easily become bland. You started off OK and then I thought it was going to develop but it just kind of stayed the same. Did not like the drum programming. That's because I used to play drum many moons ago and I understand how a kit works. Of course in electronic music there are no rules so you can do whatever you want. But have a think about this...one of the reasons Jean Michel Jarre is/was so popular is that he actually uses 'classical' themes with electronic music. In other words he followed the rules for the overall structure, but then threw the rule book away and added whatever he thought the piece requires. Let's say you are going to compose a piece of electronic music 20 minutes long. I suggest you plan the different sequences on a chart or whiteboard. THEN, you start composing - let's say you decide that you are going to have an intro of 2 or 3 minutes - then it must change (to keep the momentum and interest alive), and you build on a theme (VERY IMPORTANT POINT), then you divert from that, break up the rhythmn and maybe introduce a 'quiet' meandering section (depending on what you want to say of course), then maybe revert to the main theme and close with an outtro. That's what I look for in EM. Hey but that's just me. Your piece kind of got lost and then you were just noodling. Think of hook lines - maybe 4 or 5 of them and then build the piece around that. It's a lot more work but you will yield better results. End of sermon.

Oh and I am not trying to pull your work apart - just give you some guidelines that have worked since the beginning of time. Learn the rules of composition, implement the rules & then break them. The relationship between melody, harmony (check around the 4 minute mark) & rhythmn will never change, whether we are using synthesizers or sitars.

[Music Head]

that's sorta what I was thinkin' too