My song, ALL feedback is much appreciated!
I have this song on youtube and ive gotten all positive feedback.
Im curious as to what people think of solely the lyrics
A grown woman
just a child without innocence
wants to be a kid again
but she lacks the ignorance damn
she hates this world it s a fucked up world we live in
we all get tired wonder if lifes worth living
were too young for all these problems we have babies makin babies
everybodys breaking hearts with the victims creating victims
its sickenin i know
but im caught up in it too
in your teary eyes i see the shit the world has put you thru
ive been thru all the games i swear i caught a disease
now theres a monster deep inside me that demands to be pleased
I, try to stop but baby i dont control it so i break another heart
and it seems pleased for the moment
i dont feel my emotions so i feed of yours
i need a beautiful girl to come and lift this curse, help me
swim good now im fighting the tide
when you feel no emotions it makes them easy to hide
i know there still somewhere there somewhere deep inside me
this monster needs fresh hearts but baby dont provide me
(just the first verse, i finished the whole song.)
let me know what you think, if you wanna hear how it actually flows
check it out http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mvvx1niHTEw
hey their charlie,the thing is actualy appeasing..it just needs more attention,and working on alot.the verse is
really working out for me.great.
Really like the lyrics. Very relate-able to life man.